It was Bobby’s worst day. His friend, Percy, had just kidnapped by a gargantuan monster, the Bahemoth. Know he was on a turbulent quest to save Percy. He was at the monster’s dungeon, but he first had to pee, so he went to a portta potty near the dungeon. While he was, leaving the portta potty, someone entered,…as the door slammed, he knew… it was the Bahemoth. he tried his best to leave, but the monster rebuffed him, so Bobby took out riptide and slashed the monster. Suddenly, Bobby woke. He discovered it was all a avid dream, he said
Percy is at it again. I’d like your writing to be more formal. You need to work on comma usage.